What do you think about the 2 chapter to our book. We haven't finished yet. what should We add or change.

"Mom" We muttered questioningly. We slowly open our eyes to find myself in an unusual environment. Stark We sit up and realize that I'm in a hospital room.urses frantically running around in blue uniforms to other patients and staff. We turn our head right to a doctor in a white cotton jacket to see you walk up to me. He takes the seatext to me, crossing his thin legs. "Your up, how are you" We stare at him in a sense a mystery to create an expression on our face. "Why am We here" What happened "We ask confused. The doctor tilts his head to watch the clock and took a few deep breaths and sighs before me again in the face. "I'm afraid you were in a terrible car accident. Her father and stepmother are here so

We read Chapter 1 in order to have yourovel today morning and helped a little with sentences. We also pointed out that she had written in the past and present. In this chapter, it seems clear that you write in the present, with only a few words in the past, but this can easily be changed. Also in this section some of the sentences doot make sense, had words missing or spelling problems. But writing this chapter, the way was much better than the first. It is the grammar in particular,eeds to be improved. However, this is the beginning to the end of Chapter 2 If so, then it is too short. If you plan to publish this manuscript, please be aware that their very best to the more than 30,000 words. Installed Microsoft Word and some other good programs to write to word count, so you can easily check:) But again, We would be willing to buy used them hope:) We helped a little, you too

What do you think about the 2 chapters of our book. We haveot finished yet. What should We add or change.